Wednesday, March 15, 2017

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Post 1478. Wednesday March 15

Friday Fictioneers



At eleven every night, Earnest wound the clock before climbing into bed with his beloved Mavis. It was a wedding present and in fifty years hadn’t lost a second. One night he said ‘Look after it won't you’. She couldn’t wake him in the morning.

At eleven last night, Mavis wound the clock and adjusted the hands. It started losing time after Earnest went. She touched a  finger to her lips, then to its face. ‘See you soon’ she whispered.

This morning her helper noticed the clock had stopped at eleven-o-three. Mavis was in bed, she’d passed away. In her hand was a clock key, on her face a smile.




With thanks to Rochelle for hosting Friday Fictioneers and to Jennifer Pendergast for her photo prompt.



39 comments:

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    1. I am aren't I? Oh, the story! Thanks neil

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  2. One cannot live without the other. It is romantic in a way, isn't it? And so often when one goes, the other follows closely behind. Truly lovely, Keith

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  3. Some things (and people) come in pairs. And it's too difficult to live with half a heart. I'm glad there was a smile in the end.

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  4. Dear Keith,

    Touching if not timely. (someone had to say it.) Truly lovely story, all kidding aside.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

    https://rochellewisoff.com/2017/03/15/17-march-2017/

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    1. Haha!They did indeed. Thanks so much Rochelle

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  5. This was so sweet and tender, and I wish we all could leave that peacefully, and never be separated from our beloved one too long.

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  6. They weren't apart for very long. Nice.

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  7. Romantic but a little sad. Great piece!

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    1. I think I'd label it poignant - partly because I love the word! Much appreciated Alistair

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  8. Very poignant story, but it doesn't really leave me sad. Nicely done.

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    1. ...just as I hoped Loré. Thanks for your generous words.

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  9. Wonderful, to love someone so much and to pass into the ever-after so close to each other. A most endearing tale, Keith.

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    1. It must be wonderful. It does sometimes happen I'm sure.

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  10. great love story. thank you for sharing.

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  11. Oh that was so poignant, Keith - thank you!

    Susan A Eames at
    Travel, Fiction and Photos

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  12. Sweet and sad at the same time. Lovely.

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    1. That's what I thought. Thanks for dropping by

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  13. Awwww. If you got to go, that's a sweet way to do it.

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  14. So poignant, and it can be so true that this happens.

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  15. I'm just going to echo the others:a lovely little bit of storytelling.

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